If you want to be a
better screenwriter,

You don't need script coverage.

you need development notes

Script coverage is for buyers. It tells the executive if they should bother to read your script or send it to file 13. This means, script coverage may highlight a few problems in your screenplay, but it won't help you address those problem areas. But if you can't address the notes and promptly turnaround a revised draft of your screenplay, then you won't build the skillsets necessary to make it in Hollywood.

That's so frustrating! Getting notes doesn't have to feel this way.  If you've written a few screenplays and received contradictory, subjective, and inapplicable notes that leave you confused and unsure where to start in your rewrite, TPP is here to give you a big WOOSAH. Our Development Notes are detailed feedback in practical terms to show you why your script isn't working and how you can fix it so your script can be a page-turning writing sample for your portfolio.

Hollywood executives give Development Notes to the biggest names in the industry. TPP is giving them to you to boost your screenwriting career.

tackle your rewrite with development notes

Development Notes are for Emerging to Established screenwriters who have a keen understanding of screenplay structure and are prepared to write on deadline to complete their rewrite through 1:1 work with a Story Expert.

Throw away your frustrations with unhelpful coverage and unlock your confidence through Development Notes:
  • Grasp being open to receiving notes and making the note work for you
  • Practice interpreting the note within the note from executives and producers
  • Learn a proven system to effectively address notes
  • Become efficient in meeting writing deadlines
  • Master your revisions and add an impactful script to your professional writing portfolio
QUESTIONS ABOUT DEVELOPMENT NOTES?

Feature Screenplays +
TV Scripts

how development notes work

Our TPP methodology focuses on why your script isn't working and teaches you how to fix it with 1:1 guidance from your personal Story Expert.

  • Purchase Development Notes by screenplay format
  • Submit your screenplay via the link in your confirmation email
  • Receive a welcome email introduction to your assigned Story Expert for your writing journey
  • Receive your Development Notes
  • Option to Add-On a Notes Call
    • Ask your Story Expert clarifying questions about your notes
    • Discuss the option to work 1:1 with your Story Expert through your rewrite
DEVELOPMENT NOTES SERVICE INCLUDES:
  • Turnaround Time: 2 Weeks
  • Feedback on feature, 1hr, and 1/2hr TV scripts.
  • Extensive Page Notes, including but not limited to:
    • Structure
    • Character
    • Story
    • Formatting
    • Areas of confusion
    • Suggested revisions​
  • Logline Review
  • Social Responsibility Analysis
  • Recommendation: Pass/Needs Development/Consider
  • Option to Add-On a Notes Call to answer any clarifying questions
  • Option to work 1:1 with your personal Story Expert through a Rewrite Package
What's included in the Logline Review?
Your personal TPP Story Expert will provide feedback that ensures your logline will entice Hollywood executives into wanting your screenplay in their hands. The service includes:
  • Detailed Feedback on your logline
  • TPP’s Signature Logline Formula
  • Sample Logline using TPP's Formula
What is a Social Responsibility Analysis?
It's a chicken or egg concept. Does life imitate art or does art imitate life? What we know as screenwriters is that our stories reach the masses, and the way we portray our characters, especially underrepresented groups, unconsciously (or consciously) create messages about those groups of people.
 
In an effort to support and challenge our Pen Pals to create their best work, TPP evaluates the social responsibility and cultural competencies in your screenplay to help you become aware of potential blind spots while also helping you to think critically about how your work can affect and impact the reader, executives and viewers.

​Your personal Story Expert will evaluate responsible writing by how story elements such as dialogue, character descriptions and actions, and themes treat its world and characters with care and consideration taking the following into account:​
  • Implicit bias, stereotypes, tropes, harmful archetypes and cliches
  • Treatment of non-male, non-white, and/or queer & LGBTQ+ characters
  • Excessive or gratuitous sexual and other violence which does not advance the plot, push the story forward, or create nuanced character development
What's included in the Rewrite Package?

REWRITE PACKAGE

$1500
6 weeks of 2 hour, 1:1 work with your Story Expert to address your notes in your screenplay leaving you with a bomb script to add to your professional writing portfolio. Rewrite packages are available on a case-by-case basis and at Story Expert availability.
​Can I select my Story Expert?
All new Pen Pals are assigned a Story Expert upon submission of their screenplay. If you have a preferred Story Expert, there is an option to select them at check out. If you have worked with TPP in the past, you will automatically continue working with your previously assigned Story Expert to continue tracking your progress.
What does the recommendation mean?
Find more information about recommendations here.
Is there a discount for subsequent rounds of Development Notes?
​After your initial round of Development Notes and revisions, continue refining your script with our Story Notes service at a discounted rate for our loyal Pen Pals. For more details and to submit your revised draft to your Story Expert, please use this form.
I wrote a short. Can TPP help me?
 Yes, TPP can assist you with your short film. While we provide comprehensive Development Notes for feature films and TV scripts only, we recognize the value of short films in a screenwriter’s career. For short scripts less than 25 pages, Pen Pals can schedule a consultation to receive detailed story notes in the margins of their script and have a discussion with a Story Expert about their story’s development. Schedule a consultation for your short here.
I want to talk about my notes.
When you submit your script for Development Notes, there is an option to add-on a Notes Call. This is a one-hour session to ask clarifying questions of your Story Expert. Add-on a Notes Call for $125 during checkout.
Starting @ $199.00

LOOKING FOR A DISCOUNT ON YOUR
REVISED DRAFT?

At The Professional Pen, we believe in a personalized coaching journey. Unlike other services where you might receive feedback from different readers each draft, leading to contradictory notes and confusion, we assign you a dedicated Story Expert who stays with you from your first draft to your polished final draft. This consistency ensures a clear, cohesive path to refining your screenplay, providing you with support and expert guidance tailored to your script’s needs.

Short Films

While TPP provides comprehensive Development Notes for feature films and TV scripts only, we recognize the value of short films in a screenwriter’s career. For short films up to 25 pages, Pen Pals can schedule a 1hr consultation to receive detailed story notes in the margins of their script and discuss their story’s development with a Story Expert. ​
​Take your short film from script to screen with confidence.

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